Problem:   When there is a very strong build-up at the front of the plane, it is what is known as a shock wave.

 

Revision:  When a very strong build-up occurs at the front end of  the plane, a shock wave occurs.

 

Problem:   When there is decay of a radioactive substance, there is the emission of some form of a high-energy particle—an alpha particle, a beta particle, or a gamma ray.

 

Revision:  When a radioactive substance decays, some form of a high-energy particle—an alpha particle, a beta particle,  or a gamma ray—is emitted.

 

Problem:   It is the results of studies of the central region of the M87 galaxy that have shown that there are stars near the  center that move around as though there were some huge mass

           at the center that was attracting them.

 

Revision:  Recent studies of the central region of the M87 galaxy have shown stars near the center moving around as though some huge mass at the center were attracting them.

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